This is the second of these language arts assignments that I have done. This one is about the founder of Godin Guitars.
For over thirty years, Robert Godin has been pushing the boundaries of both acoustic and electric guitar design. Robert's innovations in semi-acoustic guitars, multi voice instruments, and synth access have made Godin an industry leader in all of these categories. Godin's ongoing commitment to value and innovation has never been more evident than in the 2005 model lineup.
Unlike the first paragraph is in proper form so the whole paragraph is going to get better feedback from myself. The topic sentence is great, very proper and right to the point. The second gives you more of a clear view of what the guitar company Godin does. The third sentence(the concluding sentence)is clear and decisive.
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